‘Teenagers are lazy monsters’ essay.

 

English Essay:                             ‘Teenagers are lazy monsters’

I strongly disagree with the statement ‘teenagers are lazy monsters’. This is because when you turn thirteen you don’t automatically turn into a monster.

At times, we may be a bit lazy but we have to wake up early (six to seven am). Then we have six hours of school, six periods of hard work. As you may know, we can also get detentions from one hour to half an hour. This could be a seven hour day, when we get home we have homework to do as well . Apparently we are still expected to be vivid and energetic.So why call us lazy monsters?

Why call us lazy monsters?That’s putting us under scrutiny. We, as teenagers, are going through a change, from being a sweet little kid to a smart teenager who wants to debate and discuss like adults. Listen carefully, do all of us carry knives and join gangs?The answer is no, only a small majority do. For some unknown reason the media likes to focus on the gang violence but not when we get an A star. The media doesn’t make us feel positive but make us worried.

Being a monster is being aggresive and also destroying anything in its path. This means we are uncivilised people. If we are uncivilised people why do iwe say thank you when people do us favours. A synonym for uncivilised is ill-mannered.So right there we have a reason for not being a monster/uncivilised person.

Going back when we are accused of joining gangs, we don’t just get accepted. We get accepted by another member which is usually a man. The man whom accepts you will be the leader. He will order you to do some jobs like, robbing people, hold drugs. If they do this they might be rewarded with a bit of cash or may be some shoes. Gradually over time the teen becomes more important and comes to the verge of risking his life. Therefore aren’t adults in the wrong?I guess not as we are still being scrutanised.

We, as teenagers,should not worry about this stereotype, which can be very offensive to some people, but focus on our good work from getting A stars in Maths to Achieving our dreams in sports and hobbies. As in a song sang by Kelly Clarkson, ‘What doesn’t kill you makes you stronger.’ Should inspire us to our ultimate goal which is to stop this stereotype and prove this corruption wrong.

Every one produces Meltaonin. It is a darkness hormone.This means the hormone is alive/ or active at night. Usual men and women’s melatonin kicks in at 10pm whereas ours, teenagers, kicks in at 1pm. So that means that we have a disturbed sleeping pattern and also a disturbed growth as we are going through puberty, transition from a kid to a adult, and our body needs a rest.

Now let me talk about our days, months and years. Well each day of our life is a learning process: learning new words; how to spell words; how to simplify equations; how to hold a tennis racket correctly. So for our scholastic year we have to learn, learn and learn. Thats a massive amount of information flowing into our head and remembering is not that easy. So once again we have to work hard, revise for our tests, or for our GCSE. Some of us teens are at the stage of taking there GCSE, all of this pressure that they have come throughout there five to six years at there school, also revising countless hours, staying back after school and preparation for this one test (per each subject) could be ruined by the cause of a stereotype that cannot be taken out of the individuals brain. Thats five years wasted. So I say to the adults, who are agreeing to this, to ‘grow up’ and let us live our life.

Finishing off my essay, which is disagreeing with the statement ‘teenagers are lazy monsters’. Is that there is no main argument with the people who agree with the statement as it directed at a small proportion (10%) of us .

Liam Lauciello-Destefanis

 

 

2 Comments

  1. What an excellent way to start your blog!

    Your argument is largely clear, and you use rhetorical questions to help show your reader where your ideas are developing. IT’s also clear that you’ve been listening to our class discussions from the work here. It makes an interesting read.

    Targets
    1) Re-read and edit your sentence structure and length – how can your meaning be made clearer? Where have you repeated yourself? Are there words missing?
    2) Your idea about melatonin (check your spelling here) is good, but I’m unsure it should appear at the beginning of your essay (unless you develop it). Again, be careful not to repeat yourself.
    3) GCSEs does not require an apostrophe in the context that you are using it. Revise your use/understanding of apostrophes.

  2. Targets
    Can you spend some time proof-reading and editing your typos? Focus on where your full stops appear. They should be immediately at the end of a sentence followed by a space before the next sentence begins.

    Secure your use of apostrophes.

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